literature

Things Grow When Left Alone

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If we had check-ups every day
we would eventually be diagnosed
with everything, even the thoughts
intrinsic to our heart.
Our soul's desiring a disease in itself,
until we can love no more.
Very short, but I didn't think I needed many lines to portray this message
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Damn. Hullo, me again. This poem is really a breathtaker. When things like this are written, it's not about the length, it's about the quality. And this has it, by far. Good job!
Since I'm not really a poetry person, I'm not gonna be able to tell you what to do, but maybe you can make more of an introduction to the poem or something <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/let…" width="15" height="15" alt=":P" title=":P (Lick)"/> Again, sorry if that's wrong c: Keep up the good work, I can't wait to read more!

Really well done! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt=":D" title=":D (Big Grin)"/>
I need 13 more words to reach the minimum so there we go.