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Falling

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In the middle of my rib-cage
my heart was floating.

Swaying in the air.

Drifting like a migrating bird
seeking warmth.

A river of butterflies;
tumbling and skipping
on their fluttering wings.

Simply from the unwavering eyes
watching me shamelessly.

Mirrored pools of brown.

I attempted to send back a smile;
my heart tried not to crumble
like a freshly baked cookie.

And in a moment it was over.

The only sound a thumping heart
and a soaring soul.

Yet I knew that everybody could hear
the gentle whisper of flapping butterfly wings.

Humming
Skipping
Falling
yup, it is about someone. I caught them looking at me and i tried to smile but i think i just did a nervous twitch xD oh well.
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isthisthingstillon's avatar
I love the imagery, and your wording is good (though maybe not such a fan of the use of "while" in the seventh stanza, the sentence would have better punch without). The one thing confusing me is your use of punctuation - why are you using so many periods and capital letters? It kind of makes the poem read as a bunch of sentence fragments from an essay that don't work on their own, versus--without punctuation--reading through like a lyric.